I know I need to be more disciplined in my poetry – take more time to refine and hone what I write. I must also stop dodging the issue of metre and the self talk that has led me to believe that ‘I don’t do iambs‘! Truly, I do find it easier to use a trochaic foot most of the time, but is this because I am too lazy to find a different way?
The One Stop Poetry exercise today could have been written specifically for me and yet twice I have shuffled off to do other things and twice returned, knowing I need to work at getting better.
So, I took yesterday’s One Shoot poem, ‘Over Exposed’, https://sallyjblackmore.co.uk/other-poems/over-exposed/, and tried to rewrite it using iambs, or even in anapests -I always give myself an escape hatch!
I have managed one verse. It is not the same poem, but holds part of the same message. I think it is anapestic, but I may be manipulating the lines to convince myself I have done what I set out to do.
Every click leaves me less of myself,
My white skin , tissue thin, is like clay
To be moulded in your preferred way.
I agree with the wise men of old
on that film you have trapped my soul.
Maybe I’ll manage more and better after my Tai Chi lesson…